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Re: Comments on slides



Hi Elke,

I have updated per comments and reposted my talk (doc996 v6).

I also have some back up slides. Where should I put these?

Thanks,

       Tim

Elke-Caroline Aschenauer wrote:
On Tue, 25 Mar 2008, Tim Whitlatch wrote:


Dear Tim,

I think a very nice talk.
I will not give comments on the spelling, they would never be as complete
as Dan's so here some small additional remarks.

slide 8: the inner skin arrow points to a funny place

slide 9: why do we need 50 micron precission on the holes

slide 12: some infor on the gas tight connector is not readable

slide 18: question to both cdc and fdc what is the tolerable leak rate for
         the chambers.

slide 22: why are the field wires under more tension than the sense wires

cheers elke


Date: Tue, 25 Mar 2008 17:07:39 -0400
From: Tim Whitlatch <whitey@jlab.org>
To: Daniel S. Carman <carman@jlab.org>
Cc: halld-pid@jlab.org, FDC email list <halld-tracking-hw@jlab.org>
Subject: Re: Comments on slides

Dear Dan,

Thank you very much for taking a close look at all my slides. I have
addressed many of your comments and have reposted.

I do not intend to show any slides on the cable attach inside the BCAL.
Chucks picture is a cartoon for now. I did plan on mentioning some sort
of attachment on the maintenance slide.

Also, I do not plan on getting into details on the magnetic field quench
during the talk. I will mention we are looking into it and have some
preliminary calculations.

The lower figure on slide 24 is a section cut from the area circled.

Thanks again.

Tim

Daniel S. Carman wrote:
> Tim,
>
> Things are looking better and better in your talk.  I have gone
> over the slides and my comments are below.  Let me know if you
> have any questions.
>
>
>                 Regards,
>
>                     Daniel
>
> **********************************************************************
> pp.8 : Meaning of Phi=119.5cm in upper-left corner?
>
> pp.10 : Make figure slightly smaller to separate it from bullets.  This
>         is a problem on several slides in your talk.  Note that 20 micron
>         is wire diameter.
>
> pp.12 : Labels overlap figure.  Make it slightly smaller to separate
>         from bullets.
>
> pp.14 : For the text in the lower right, make it span 2 lines to avoid
>         overlap with the slide number.
>
> pp.16 : eliminate punctuation on 4th bullet for consistency.
>
> Note: leaks are not the real problem (for a non-flammable gas mixture).
>       The issue is contamination of the gas from water and oxygen.  In
>       general, if things can get from the inside to the outside, they
>       can surely get from the outside to the inside!
>
> pp.19 : Missing ")" on 2nd bullet.  Note that FDC assembled as single
>         structure for installation.  Note that 118 cm diameter is too
>         small.  This is the O.D. of the frame and does not account for
>         the cabling.
>
> Note: You have not mentioned anything about the FDC cable support
>       inside the solenoid (outside the BCAL).  Is the current plan
>       too premature/underdeveloped for at least a mention?  Chuck
>       has a picture that I included in the FDC TDR.
>
> pp.20 : On 3rd bullet, use "o-ring grooves".
>
> pp.21 : The wording "structural skin" is unneccesarily repeated repeated.
>
> pp.22 : Again, 20 microns and 80 microns are wire diameters.  Use the
>         term "sense wire" and not "signal wire".  Also note that the
>         tension choices for the W and CuBe wire are chosen to match the
>         gravitational sag.
>
> pp.24 : Fig. labels overlap bullets.  Also the lower figure does not
>         make sense to me.  It looks like we have square frames.  It
>         might be worth mentioning that tubes/skins will be light-weight.
>         Skins will not allow for current path in case of a magnet
>         quench.
>
> pp.26 : The point of this slide is not clear.  This model is being made
>         and calculations carried out to determine the hole locations and
>         sizes to ensure a uniform gas mixture and (semi-) rapid gas
>         volume exchange.  It is crucial to have no pockets of stagnant
>         gas.  Also note that the holes in the cathodes rotate from
>         cathode layer to cathode layer.
>
> pp.27 : Labels overlap bullets.
>
> pp.28 : Move slide contents further below the title.
>
> pp.29 : Note that wire frame boards are only partially stuffed prior to
>         wire stringing.  Additional components (including the connectors)
>         are added after stringing.
>
> pp.32 : FDC installed from the upstream end should be stated explicitly.
>
> pp.33 : All bullet for why we extract from downstream end for servicing.
>         The point is not to disturb the CDC, target, start counter,
>         beamline, etc. (or their alignment).  Also note that the first
>         step in downstream extraction is to move the downstream carriage
>         downstream and then to install the service platform.
>
> pp.34 : Spurious "[" on first bullet.  Also I do not know what you are
>         saying in the 2nd bullet.
>
> pp.36 : Meaning of 2nd bullet unclear.  Also statement on minimizing
>         material in the active area is unclear.  The bars themselves
>         are in the active area.
>
> pp.37 : On 3rd bullet, use 252 cm**2 (i.e. superscript) active area.
>         On 4th bullet, use "6 cm" not "6cm".
>         On 5th bullet, use "readout" not "read".
>         On 6th bullet, is hole 12 cm**2?
>
> pp.38 : Fig. labels overlap words.
>
> pp.40 : Missing your footer here.  Also you have not mentioned the
>         movement of the downstream carriage.
>
> pp.41 : Slide is incomplete.  State what has been done to address this
>         issue in the FDC, CDC, and TOF.  Mention Al endplate for CDC.
>         Ref. Elton's GlueX note and give some relevant scale for the
>         forces involved.  In other words, beef this slide up a bit.
>
> pp.43 : Note that this is an example for one subsystem (the FDC) and
>         that this hazard analysis has been done for all Hall D/GlueX
>         subsystems and the Hall itself.
>
> pp.44 : On 3rd bullet, I would say "Some details still need to be ironed
>         out".
>         On 5th bullet, why not say "personnel and equipment safety".
>         We are designed the detector and all construction/installation
>         procedures certainly to protect the workers, but a big part of
>         the design is also to protect the system (our investment) in
>         case of failures or problems.
> **********************************************************************
> **********************************************************************
> *                                                                    *
> * Dr. Daniel S. Carman                   e-mail : carman@jlab.org    *
> * Staff Scientist                        office : (757)-269-5586     *
> * Jefferson Laboratory                   web: www.jlab.org/~carman   *
> *                                                                    *
> **********************************************************************
>
>
>
>


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